Create an evaluation in either written, audio or visual medium, which critically evaluates your pitch and investigation against your original proposal and also evaluates what you have learnt and also makes recommendations for future and further development..
For this years Enter The Pitch I believe I chose a far more complex story than my last “attempt”, For this years idea I had to think hard and read further into the story I chose, I believe I could of included more main points and will remember this for hopefully next time.
My finished video worked well along with my proposal and schedule. During my research I had to ensure I used valid websites and books with added information, I believe this year the reason why my pitch I think, is much better than last years is because we had more time in order to be able to research a more possibly complicated story to show what we could do and how we’ve progressed our skills during the year we’ve had since last entering.
I think my Video for Enter the pitch this year is much better than last years as I don’t think it’s as “sloppy” and includes many main points.
My only drawback during this is I repeated myself quite abit on one main point.
The effectiveness of my video worked overall and everyone who I’ve recently shown it to said they felt the actors feelings in the video along with the text to explain what is happening.
Over the year of learning new skills on the editing software I used, I believe that also contributed to my video presentation looking better.
In future I hope to choose a less complicated story so I can hopefully make it a lot better visually and on paper.
I have learnt that even if a story visually is slightly “sloppy” it may still get the point across and that less is actually more when pitching across a story you can see better with text.
With our tasks given I think they included in helping such as having a planned schedule and actually working towards it instead of not having the time to write one before.
In my opinion my Enter The Pitch work this year has improved from last year due to being more organised and more motivated to join in with the extra time we we’re given.
Gson, B. (2014). The Last Supper. Available: http://christianity.about.com/od/biblestorysummaries/p/thelastsupper.htm. Last accessed 24th sept 2014.
I also used a genuine Holy Bible from the Enter The pitch team.
Finished and Submitted piece:
Create planning to assist in the creation of your pitch. (i.e script, shot list, storyboard, location recce, H&S, etc) The information you submit for this section is dependent on your pitch but there should definitely be evidence)
Script for my pitch shall simply just be a male voice exclaiming he made it into uni to show he is leaving which is the start of my story,
For my shot list I have planned for it mainly to be text but how I want it to go is:
– Starting off with the verse I have chosen
– A scene of an alone male
– Party scene
– text explaining how my story will start and its connection to the chosen bible story
– flashing images of groups together to show “togetherness”
– More text explaining how my story will work
– Drama images of fighting
– text explaining how drama in the modern story will happen.
The locations I have used include
– Brooksby Melton
– Free Images of wars
The whole video will be the length of hopefully 2 minutes and will include all main points of the story.
Evaluate suitability/validity of research you have discovered.
The suitability of my story is based on how new university students would feel leaving their home town to a new one and leaving a life behind them.
I believe my story is suitable for all ages but mainly based on 18+ because they can feel exactly what the main character would be going through.
during my research in finding the story I was going to use I ensured I was using valid stories by reading a proper bible and using proper websites on the story I have involved.
I also took it upon myself to enter the church where I live to ask for more information but they were busy.
I used a group of people I live with in my age range from 18+ to ask if they would watch a bible story turned modern if it was based on something they had been through before, the outcome was positive.
I think next time I will create some form of video to collate a group of people in and show them watching a clip from the film and ask if they enjoyed it then explain what it is.
During my research for Enter the Pitch I came across the rules and the formats for everything :
Conduct research into an idea for a pitch that you submit for enter the pitch.
The Idea I will be using is “The Last Supper”.
I chose this story because it involved a lot of main points aimed at the younger generation, To start research, I began by reading the bible and mainly finding small paragraphs on many church websites using google. Current research and set out includes ensuring I know all important facts that can be used for the pitch and possibly in the feature length production.
I spent mainly most of the time finding what points I could change into a modern feel.
I used a lot of information from trustable websites and using a holy bible obtained from Enter The Pitch Team Last year, The main points I chose to include are the betrayal Jesus knew was coming from Judas and the fact he was leaving. In the Last Supper verse Jesus was leaving to the cross and met with his “friends” before. In my version I have used that and changed it to a young adult leaving for university knowing someone will leave him.
I will include images of a life he had with his friends along with images of him alone and how he feels compared to how he used to.
my video will mainly be including text with background image in hope to add a more personal feel of things fading away.
I included a video shot of a character to try and put a face to feelings.
Justify the suitability and achievability of your investigation into an idea for enter the pitch. Basically, will you be able to identify/find the information you need to create your pitch and will your pitch be appropriate to the competition?
The suitabilty of my nvestigation was mainly based on using a story taken and created to be aimed at a younger generation, I then asked a few people who I live with what they would think to watching a bible story more based around their age range, the outcome was pleasing as they all agreed they would like to see more relgious stories based upon their time.
If the plan went well I believe my story could be adapted further and might one day be a good story to possibly create a short film about.
Enter the pitch is a comepetion based on finding out what people can do with bible stories in this day and age, the only thing they ask is that the story you have created has a biblical connection and has been modified from a orginal bible story.
I believe my pitch is appropriate in many ways for this competition and it has a strong story to go with it, It also could possibly allow other young adults who are also non-religious to indulge in trying out for the competition.
I used an official Holy Bible and very trusted About Religion webite for my main research, it was a pretty basic story to begin with in modern times and I added my own take on it in hope it would make sense and show what i could do and what I have learnt in the past year.